I worry a little bit about this chapter. The problem is, it’s probably one of the chapters that has undergone the most revisions. Not in a “Fix problems” way—more in a “I need to add scenes to the book. Where shall I put them” kind of way.
For instance, the beginning has a few paragraphs that—looking at them now—I think drag on a bit. The reiteration of Vin’s relationship with Shan, for instance. I put it in because I need to indicate that time has passed, and that Vin’s relationships have continued, but I worry that I spent too much time on it at the beginning of the scene. Next, I added another scene showing skaa life (the one with children shaking the trees) in order to remind the reader of how bad things are. Then, later on, I changed the book to have canal convoys rather than caravans. So, this chapter got some more revisions. Then, I added a lot to the scene with Marsh, including Vin’s discussion of her mother.
All in all, it feels like a hodge-podge chapter to me. A lot of important information is explained, but it doesn’t fit together as well as I might have wanted. The rhythm of the chapter is just a little… off.
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