Anyway. . .I break triad here again. I’d forgotten about this one. Actually, you’ll note that the closer I get to an action sequence or a climax, the more quickly I shift viewpoints. I do it half-intentionally, half-unconsciously. (If that’s possible.) Logically, I know that quickly-shifting viewpoints give the scenes more tension and a sense of movement. Unconscious, I just know that it’s good storytelling to keep things quick—and it’s more dramatic when you can end with a cliff-hanger line, then switch to a new viewpoint.
I’ll admit that this scene borders on being too melodramatic. A couple of things justify it in my mind. First, the scene is more about Raoden confronting how he’d made a mistake with Shaor’s men than it is about Sarene discovering that she’d been betrayed. Second, Sarene’s ‘betrayal,’ as explained in the next chapter, is really about her own prejudice. Inside, she was just waiting for something like this to happen. That’s why she didn’t give Raoden the benefit of the doubt—she never wanted to like him. It was almost like she was eager to be hurt, expecting it, since things obviously couldn’t work out for her. (Or so she unconsciously assumed.)
So, in a way, they were both kind of expecting something like this to happen. When it did happen, they allowed it to. In my mind, this takes it from a ‘silly misunderstanding’ and changes it into a ‘character-driven conflict.’
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