To: Les Dabel, Ernst Dabel
Sent: Wednesday, November 16, 2005 5:16 PM
Subject: Re: Seruko and Canluum Guard revised sketches/ Page layouts 4, 5, 6
The layouts look good, and I look forward to seeing the inks. I do have some corrections for the script, though.
A correction for the wording on page 7, panel 1. It should read, “Lan floated in the ko’di , one with his sword.” And in panel 2, it should read, “Lan danced the forms; time flowed like cool honey.” Also, on page 12, panel 1, Merean should be saying, “She’s undisciplined, Larelle, and too old, I’d say.”
Jim
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