On a more serious note, this section contains some of the more lengthy additions to the rewrite. Elend’s speech, and the arguments against it, were all added in the very last draft. As I said before, the first draft had Elend giving a much different proposal, as the army hadn’t arrived yet.
This works TONS better. I worry that Elend comes off a little too strong—or, well, not weak enough—in this scene. I originally included it to show some of his faults as a leader. However, other readers have indicated that they thought he came off as too weak. Even if this is a book about Elend becoming a leader (or, at least, that’s a big chunk of the novel) he doesn’t have to quite as hopeless as I originally painted him.
So, perhaps we’ve got a good balance going on here.
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